I like the first two sentences a lot, Barbara. Good, clean crisp sentences that set up a lot of tension and expectation for me. Who is it that's diving there at Red Slave? (Someone's got to be diving, otherwise why are we there at all?) And why? What is he up to? Is it Manning? (It could be Manning, setting up some deal or other.) Or maybe it's Jack, out on that crazy treasure hunt. You know, Barbara, you've really got me hooked into this story. All you have to do now is reel me in.
Bob;-)
No comments:
Post a Comment