Good meeting last night, guys. Jenny, you should teach writing. I learned so much from your comments after the critique. Thanks.
September 18--It's raining now--Big fat drops fell making craters in the dust. Alby lay on his stomach, glasses perched on his nose, and watched. He saw the little explosion of dust when each drop hit and the corona of droplets flung in a perfect circle. Alby was a fan of National Geographic magazine, and not just the naked natives issues either, but he especially liked the stop-motion pictures of a man or a horse running, an arrow exploding out of a Red Delicious apple, or a bullet slicing a playing card in two. He was saving his money for a camera and a tripod he could use to take his own stop-motion photos with so he would finally win the Sunnyside Elementary School Science Fair once and for all.
I hope to see postings from the rest of you. Jenny, how about a flash?
--Barbara
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